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A Dance To Remember by ~komto13:iconkomto13:



When Seleniax’s father had died he had left the throne to his thirteen year old daughter saying that when she was matured she would be able to rule the kingdom. In the mean time her father’s advisors and royal counsel was appointed to rule the kingdom of Draconia. On Seleniax’s seventeenth birthday there was a celebration as there was every year for her royal highness, the whole kingdom gathered in the various gathering halls to celebrate the good news. Everyone was able to watch the main event happen in the grand hall through portals that the magi had cast. At 10:12 PM the royal counsel made an announcement that Princess Seleniax would be appointed the ruler of the kingdom on this night. She was to keep her title of princess until she was to be wed in which she would gain the title of Queen Seleniax. This night begins an adventure that will bind two souls and destinies together.
Something was new on this night, other than the change of rulers; there was a new guard that she had never seen before who was looking over at her a majority of the time. “Hey, do you think I would be allowed to talk to the princess if I walked up there and started to talk to her?” asked the new guard. This guard is sixteen years old, long brown hair that is down to his neck all the way around. He has bright blue eyes that shimmer as though they are made of ice. He stands at five feet ten inches tall with a slim but athletic build. He is clad in leather armor that would not protect well against much.
“How in the hell should I know? My job is to protect her not to talk to her, and if you had half a mind in that skull of yours you would just stay at your post and not ask stupid questions.” declared the older and more experienced guard.
“I’m going for it!” exclaimed the new guards walking away from his post, with his simple sword at his side. He walks up towards the princess as two guards, one seemingly larger than the other, stop him to ask what he was thinking he was doing. “I want to speak to the princess to congratulate her on becoming ruler and to wish her a happy birthday” said the guard “and if you don’t mind I would like to get through.” The guard then is thrown back by the knights and told him to not return.
Seleniax is seventeen years old at this point. She has long flowing brown hair that was just recently cut to her shoulders for the event. Her eyes are a green grey that sparkle as though nothing is wrong. Her smile could warm even the saddest moment and her stare could scare away a strong warrior. Seleniax stands at five foot five inches tall. Unlike most of the other females of the area who wore loose clothing, Seleniax preferred wearing tight clothing that would show off her curves and breasts.
Seleniax watching this whole ordeal go on and rose from her seat as the knights started to drag the guard away. She sensed that there was something different about this guard, a special connection that she had not had with any of her upper class friends, a sense of purity. “Where do you think you are taking him?” asked the princess to the knights.
“This rubbish thought he could speak with you in person so we were going to throw him out” answered the bigger knight.
Seleniax, obviously unhappy with his response returns by saying “I wish him to join me at my table for the night now. Guard, what is your name?”
The knights let go of their grips on the guard and he feebly replies “The name is Redemption Jirochi, milady, Redem for short.”
“Well Redem it seems that you will be joining me at my table tonight, is there anything else we need to have settled while I am here?” asked the princess as she reached her soft hands out to help the guard up.
“I am on shift and supposed to be guarding the Westside doors. So if someone could watch that for me it would be nice.” the guard replied as fast as he could as not to waste the princess’s time.
Seleniax points at the two large knights. “You two idiots are now on guard duty at the Westside doors, tell the other guard there that he is to go and join the festivities.”
“Right away milady!” they responded immediately and in unison. As ordered the two knights go to the door and relieve the guard of his duties.
Seleniax and Redem both start heading toward the table while Redem talks about how hard it is to become even a guard for her. During this time Redem noticed that Seleniax had a very pure and gentle air about her as she smiled at him. As they approach the table the counsel had noticed that she was bringing a guard to sit with her and had the royal tailor bring him some finer clothes. The tailor brought Redem a blue silk shirt and black silk lined slacks. Half an hour after they had sat down, now about eleven pm, the band began to play and the dance was to begin with the first dance with the princess. There were several princes of other lands at the party, who asked the princess to dance, she humbly declined them all.
“Princess, may I ask why you say no to all of these princes?” asked Redem with a quite puzzled look on his face.
“Because I am waiting for the right person to ask.” responded Seleniax with the very subtle hint that she was waiting for him to ask her.
“Well, I know you are saying no to all these other guys but…um…Princess Seleniax, may I have this dance?” he asked very shyly and innocently
“Of course you can.” Seleniax told him, smiling. “I was waiting for you to ask; now the dance can begin after we have the spotlight dance.”
“Princess, you mean it will only be us on the dance floor? With the whole kingdom watching us?” he inquired with the most terrified look on his face. “Milady I have never formally danced before and I do not wish to embarrass you.” Redem begins to blush.
“Too late, you already asked me to dance!” She grabs his hand and holds it softly. “Are you going to make it look like I am forcing you?” Seleniax then gives Redemption an innocent look which melts his self-doubt away.
“Of course not princess” Redemption rises from his seat and formally asks Seleniax to dance. She raises her hand so that he can escort her to the floor; the magi cast the projection of Redemption and Seleniax walking down the stairs from the royal table to the dance floor. As the conductor raises his baton all the lights go out except for four spotlights that the magi’s apprentices are controlling with their magic. The conductor holds his baton up in his dimly lit cove then counts off the small orchestra, a slow sweet tune begins to play and the couple on the floor begins to slowly dance along to the beat.
At the royal table the princes are becoming infuriated with the princess for dancing with a commoner whose job is to protect the area she is in from common thieves. The knights at the Westside door are now completely astonished by the point that the small child got to dance with her. In the darkest corner you see the older guard, who was on duty with Redemption, smiling at the fact that the boy could actually even get the chance to talk with the princess.
“Seleniax I have to ask you, why did you choose me as your dance partner for your first dance as ruler?” Redem queried.
“It is tradition in Draconia for the newly appointed ruler for their first dance to be with someone they feel that they have the strongest emotions for in the kingdom that is not family. As the princess of the kingdom I shall not break traditions. You are the one I like the most and I know almost nothing about you, I guess it is love at first sight. When I first saw you being taken away by the knights I just felt as if I had to have you near me, this kind of…pure feeling.” responded princess Seleniax.
“You mean as if the person is pure and kind? Like as if while you are with this person nothing wrong will happen, because that is how I felt when our eyes first met. Now under these lights with everyone watching I do not care how I look or if I mess up at all because I know I have you. Seleniax, you are the only person who I have had that feeling about as well.” As the song enters the finale Redem has a power come over him that is controlling him to use the most advanced dance sets, as if he was a master dancer. “I guess the magi approve of us because of the fact that I cannot dance this well.” Redem says jokingly.
After the song comes to a close the two walk back to the table to watch the nobles dance on the floor as the orchestra plays on. Redemption pulls a necklace with a silver ring with Celtic knots upon its entirety from upon his neck. “This ring belonged to my mother and was her wedding band. I just wanted to know if you would accept this ring as a token of my love for you. The knot is symbolic of my love, never ending.” Redem quoted from the inscription on the inside of the ring.
“Of course I will, I wish I had something special to give you but I do promise you that I will get you something.” Seleniax said as her eyes started to water with tears of joy.
“You don’t have to, I did this because that ring is special to me and I have an emotional and spiritual bond to it so whenever you are in trouble I know I will be able to sense it from your ring...” As Redemption was speaking Seleniax remembers about her necklace she had on.
“SH!” The princess silences the guard and tells him to close his eyes, he did as he was told and closed his eyes. “Okay you can open them now!” Seleniax said, exited as her lover opened his eyes to see a necklace with a pendant on the bottom of a dragon on a sword. “Father told me to give this to my white knight. You are the only one pure enough to bestow the title upon in this kingdom so I will knight you here and now.”
She starts to tap her glass with her spoon and the lights change from dim to bright. “I have an announcement to make, sorry for interrupting the festivities but this one thing calls a priority to me. Captain of the Guard may I have the Draconia Blade and the holy blade, also known as Xyn.” The Captain of the Guard gets the items instantaneously and hands them to her majesty. “I, Princess Seleniax Renee, pronounce you, Redemption Jirochi, as the white knight to my kingdom.” She taps both shoulders with the Draconia Blade. “I also present to you Xyn, the holy blade of Draconia, which is the symbol of the white knight of Draconia.” When she finishes the knighting of the boy, he rises, and she kisses him lightly on the lips. Redem kisses her back knowing that anything is possible.
©2009-2010 ~komto13
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the story is straight from my heart. It is also an opening idea for a novel i plan on writing.

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:iconmetalsharinganxiii:
Hmmm. I kind of like it. The writting isn't that bad...but I'm not one to believe in "love at first sight". It seems a little too Cinderella. Then again, you may have been shooting for that and if you were I understand. I'm not too sure about the giving of the gifts. I'd like a little more history to their relationship before they would give each other things or say they loved each other. Maybe I'm just too cynical, but to me it seems too impulsive and rash, almost like a crush instead of love. I would also suggest names that are a little bit easier to pronounce because your intention is for it to become a book one day. I do think with a few tweaks this could become a very well written forbidden love-esque story. Best of luck.

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:iconalbinotheumbreon:
I like it, but I do have to agree with the Sharingan. If you were to make it a full out story, I would have dragged it out a bit longer. Since you say this was only the beginning, I would have to assume you have more of a plot set up. This actually reminded me slightly of Romeo and Juliet. Although, it does seem slightly of a cliche story, not trying to offend you at all. It's cute ^.^ but I think you could have been slightly more creative with it. Also, Seleniax's personality seems like you couldn't really decide if you wanted her to be more of a tomboy princess or a daddys girl. So those small parts would probably have to be fixed slightly. Other then that it was a cute story ^.^
:iconprettyprongs:
WOW! That was really really cool! Very great writing skills you have there, I must add! ^___^ It seems like a perfect love story. Perhaps too perfect though for my personal taste. Hopfully though when you make more of this story there'll be more drama. Also I feel like the charaters should have more personality as well. I beleive a character makes a story come to life. I don't want to critisize too much though, seeing how this is only the begining. ;) Great job over all!

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:iconkomto13:
Unfortunately I had to make it this short, it was for an English Assignment and it had to be 6 pages MAX so i had to chop down and make it kinda short but if i do write the story it would be in this setting and i would be expanding ALOT ON IT! I was not happy for the whole love at first sight part but i had to put a ending for the assignment.

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